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MA Knight's avatar

Horrifying

Parker McCoy's avatar

Suffocating and disgusting and horrific. Nice job, Will. Hehe.

Will Boucher's avatar

the holy trifecta lol thanks Parker!

EJ Trask's avatar

total nightmare will!

Will Boucher's avatar

Thanks EJ! You’re the master of nightmares so this is high praise coming from you :)

petrichor's avatar

bad things but good writing. also, felt validated by you thanking me at the end for reading depressing stuff

Will Boucher's avatar

you’re so welcome, I’m happy to recognize your love for depressive stories

A.P. Murphy's avatar

Grim indeed but at a prose level I'm loving the style.

Michael Edward's avatar

Great piece, Will. Gripping, horrifying, confronting. Really well done :)

Will Boucher's avatar

Thanks Michael! Always appreciate your eyes

JLG Noga's avatar

Love how this one thrives (or maybe the better word is languishes) through pure sensation almost. More impressionistic than anything, but the pieces all add up to a truly blood curdling image. Great stuff once again Will

Erichka's avatar

Really enjoyed your writing style here. Made my skin crawl immediately. The way you describe the crawl space is terrifying on its own. Great work!

Will Boucher's avatar

Thanks Erichka! I hope it wasn’t too spooky

Erichka's avatar

It was perfectly spooky.

Sudana Krasniqi's avatar

Well goddamnnnn, sir

Nick Winney's avatar

oh my gawd...that's as dark as the crawl space. love how its all a shuddery mix of sensations and viewpoints, sounds and smells and whispers and submission and memories and tiny focal points like the crack of drying blood on a hand. things you would focus on if you were trapped and confined for hours and indefinite hours.

you've got right into an horrible head space to write that. truly sinister through the suggestion of terrible things for the reader's imagination to flesh out.

👌🤌👏👏👏

Will Boucher's avatar

it made my skin crawl! the blood bit is from when I used to get bloody noses and the blood would dry on the hand and it is kinda fun to make the dried bits crack

Nick Winney's avatar

like PVA...but wrong and bad

nadav's avatar

Will are we doing alright at home? Fantastic writing.

Will Boucher's avatar

oh yes, we are good. Just purging out the recent week of news intake

thanks for reading :)